Poem About My Mother.

We had a homework assignment which was to write a poem about either one of our parents and I chose my Mom, she was a little angry at me that day so I am glad this made her a little bit happy. 

Feel free to critique it and tell me what I did wrong.

I'm particularly proud of this poem, and it's the first poem I've written that I'm proud of.

This is also my first post here. You're going to be seeing more of me here, I've been reading a lot which has inspired me to write a lot.

Mother

My life without her

would be tedious, mundane and bland.

She’s a small sweet cocoon

that shelters me

from the wild, the evil and the foul.

Her smile glows like the radiant sun

that lights up the earth.

I wish I can and relive

all the precious moments I spent with her

and I hope they live eternally.

She’s a voluminous tree

that keeps me shaded

from the wet and stormy nights.

Her hugs are like shields

that keep away enemies.

Her eyes are flowing rivers

of burnt umber paint.

She’s a never ending basket of joy

that lifts my spirits.

Her love is immortal and vast

and stronger than the force of gravity.

-Rawan